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TogueRacer | Posted: Sep 16 2008, 08:30 AM |
IDW Jr. Member Group: Members Posts: 66 Member No.: 30,595 Joined: Sep 10th 2008 Location: Manila, PH | It's great it's all good so far. But dang, I sense a Takumi in him. This post has been edited by TogueRacer on Sep 16 2008, 08:38 AM |
.M. | Posted: Sep 16 2008, 04:42 PM |
IDW God Member Group: Members Posts: 155 Member No.: 29,224 Joined: Apr 6th 2008 Location: Dallas , Texas | nothing like some good pressure |
Meteor | Posted: Sep 16 2008, 06:46 PM |
Were you expecting something else? Group: Advanced Members Posts: 3,921 Member No.: 20,929 Joined: Oct 14th 2006 Location: Some place in South-East Asia | I believe the proper term is "civilian vehicle". I liked the last two updates. FD VS Beetle battle is good too (but I noticed that the narration always cuts to whenever they enter a right hairpin when it cuts back to the driving). You certainly have a talent for characters. I'll be looking forward to more by the way. |
fettman53 | Posted: Sep 16 2008, 07:51 PM |
Request Title - PM Mods Group: Members Posts: 489 Member No.: 25,717 Joined: Aug 6th 2007 Location: Virginia | Oh yeah...civilian...vehicle. Ha...oops. Wait, what? Narration cuts to them going through a right hairpin? Well...the hairpin section of Maelstrom pass isn't much more than just straightaways and hairpins, so...I just like to make it seem like it's moving along. It's fast paced, just like real races. Like I said before though...it's hard to recreate something like this. |
TogueRacer | Posted: Sep 17 2008, 02:22 AM |
IDW Jr. Member Group: Members Posts: 66 Member No.: 30,595 Joined: Sep 10th 2008 Location: Manila, PH | Meteor, what do you mean? I'm quite confused. What's with the narration? |
Meteor | Posted: Sep 17 2008, 02:35 AM | ||
Were you expecting something else? Group: Advanced Members Posts: 3,921 Member No.: 20,929 Joined: Oct 14th 2006 Location: Some place in South-East Asia |
I simply noticed that later on in the race scene, the only corners mentioned were right hairpins. For example: It cuts to a right hairpin, then later cuts to another right hairpin. I don't have any problems with it. I simply noticed, that's all. | ||
TogueRacer | Posted: Sep 17 2008, 02:37 AM |
IDW Jr. Member Group: Members Posts: 66 Member No.: 30,595 Joined: Sep 10th 2008 Location: Manila, PH | Oh riiiight. Don't get me wrong, I was just asking. |
fettman53 | Posted: Sep 29 2008, 10:09 PM |
Request Title - PM Mods Group: Members Posts: 489 Member No.: 25,717 Joined: Aug 6th 2007 Location: Virginia | Okay...obviously I'm not doing too well here. I'm too focused on the second stage of the TXR story I'm writing, so this one isn't seeing any real attention. But I'll get on it soon. Keep your eyes on this thread! |
fettman53 | Posted: Oct 22 2008, 01:02 PM |
Request Title - PM Mods Group: Members Posts: 489 Member No.: 25,717 Joined: Aug 6th 2007 Location: Virginia | Message From Kevin: Erm...hey. I was sent here to tell you all...this story is still being redeveloped. It seems to be taking much longer than we expected...but fettman53 is hard at work getting it recreated for all of you eager readers. *meanwhile, in fettman53's room* fettman53: Zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz...... Kevin: Anyway, for those of you who would like to read it, the sequel (which happens to be much better than this story at the moment anyway) is on idw's sister site, wme...so...I actually recommend reading the sequel first. It makes this story much more interesting and fun to read. Your choice. Oh yeah...I'm the Bunta of this story, by the way. Heh heh heh... P.S. from fettman53: Sorry for the doublepost, but I wanted to make sure that people knew I posted this up. I wish that it notified you when someone makes an edit change... |
fettman53 | Posted: Oct 27 2008, 12:54 PM |
Request Title - PM Mods Group: Members Posts: 489 Member No.: 25,717 Joined: Aug 6th 2007 Location: Virginia | Alright, here's the update on this: This story is currently on hold. I've been too into writing my other story to focus on this one. However, I am posting up my other story in the Art and Graphics section of the forums. Please feel free to read it and comment on it. It will be updated with a new chapter each time someone posts something on it, such as a comment or suggestion. I hope you all enjoy it! If I decide to start on this story again, I'll definitely post an update. Until then, enjoy my other story! This post has been edited by fettman53 on Oct 27 2008, 12:55 PM |
AE86vsRX-7FD | Posted: Nov 11 2008, 01:24 PM |
Shmuck Group: Members Posts: 2 Member No.: 30,536 Joined: Aug 31st 2008 Location: Update Profile | Fettman 52. I like this story and the tokyo xtreme racer story. By the way, i am planning to write a story based on kaido battle 2. Does anyone want to hear it? |
Meteor | Posted: Nov 11 2008, 05:32 PM | ||
Were you expecting something else? Group: Advanced Members Posts: 3,921 Member No.: 20,929 Joined: Oct 14th 2006 Location: Some place in South-East Asia |
Don't bother asking. Just write it and see what feedback you get. As long as you write well, you won't be ignored. | ||
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