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It's great it's all good so far. But dang, I sense a Takumi in him.

This post has been edited by TogueRacer on Sep 16 2008, 08:38 AM

nothing like some good pressure

I believe the proper term is "civilian vehicle".

I liked the last two updates. FD VS Beetle battle is good too (but I noticed that the narration always cuts to whenever they enter a right hairpin when it cuts back to the driving).

You certainly have a talent for characters. I'll be looking forward to more by the way.

Oh yeah...civilian...vehicle. Ha...oops.

Wait, what? Narration cuts to them going through a right hairpin? Well...the hairpin section of Maelstrom pass isn't much more than just straightaways and hairpins, so...I just like to make it seem like it's moving along. It's fast paced, just like real races.

Like I said before though...it's hard to recreate something like this.

Meteor, what do you mean? I'm quite confused.

What's with the narration?

I simply noticed that later on in the race scene, the only corners mentioned were right hairpins. For example: It cuts to a right hairpin, then later cuts to another right hairpin.

I don't have any problems with it. I simply noticed, that's all.

Oh riiiight.

Don't get me wrong, I was just asking.

Okay...obviously I'm not doing too well here. I'm too focused on the second stage of the TXR story I'm writing, so this one isn't seeing any real attention. But I'll get on it soon. Keep your eyes on this thread!

Message From Kevin:

Erm...hey. I was sent here to tell you all...this story is still being redeveloped. It seems to be taking much longer than we expected...but fettman53 is hard at work getting it recreated for all of you eager readers.


*meanwhile, in fettman53's room*

fettman53: Zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz......





Kevin: Anyway, for those of you who would like to read it, the sequel (which happens to be much better than this story at the moment anyway) is on idw's sister site, wme...so...I actually recommend reading the sequel first. It makes this story much more interesting and fun to read. Your choice.

Oh yeah...I'm the Bunta of this story, by the way. Heh heh heh...



P.S. from fettman53: Sorry for the doublepost, but I wanted to make sure that people knew I posted this up. I wish that it notified you when someone makes an edit change...

Alright, here's the update on this: This story is currently on hold. I've been too into writing my other story to focus on this one. However, I am posting up my other story in the Art and Graphics section of the forums. Please feel free to read it and comment on it. It will be updated with a new chapter each time someone posts something on it, such as a comment or suggestion. I hope you all enjoy it!

If I decide to start on this story again, I'll definitely post an update. Until then, enjoy my other story!

This post has been edited by fettman53 on Oct 27 2008, 12:55 PM

Fettman 52. I like this story and the tokyo xtreme racer story. By the way, i am planning to write a story based on kaido battle 2. Does anyone want to hear it?

Don't bother asking. Just write it and see what feedback you get.

As long as you write well, you won't be ignored.