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> [FANFIC] Carbon Expressway - Epilogue, A Rift in Time
Meteor
Posted: Mar 6 2008, 08:34 PM


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Another awesomely done chapter! Especially the high-speed Wangan battle between the FD, Z and the 'vette.

What Corvette are you talking about? It was stated it WASN'T a Corvette.
However, if you wanna play "Guess That Car", be my guest.
Not all 'gaijin' drive Corvettes. D:

I thought the fic was saying that it looked like a late-generation 'vette, but isn't one.

Basically, I forgot to add in the double-apostrophe.
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Posted: Mar 14 2008, 05:45 AM


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What Corvette are you talking about? It was stated it WASN'T a Corvette.
However, if you wanna play "Guess That Car", be my guest.
Not all 'gaijin' drive Corvettes. D:[/QUOTE]
I thought the fic was saying that it looked like a late-generation 'vette, but isn't one.

Basically, I forgot to add in the double-apostrophe.

well if you paid attention, you know what the car is...

Although I'm a little suprised you would Use a T/A... Because unless your info is incorrect, The Only rwd pace car besides the corvette was the T/A(which was yellow in 02)... I don't see you using a FWD Grand Prix, especially since they didn't come with 6 speeds, and the Goat wasn't used (although I really was hoping it was a goat)

Another good chapter... Keep em rollin cool.gif
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Posted: Mar 17 2008, 09:05 PM


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Why'd you make Takumi retarded like here?

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you should've made Takumi well er.. Matured? Oh well nice update anyway. (:
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Posted: Mar 17 2008, 09:42 PM


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I think he's trying to start from the beginning of the series instead of the middle/end. So this is when Takumi is still dee-dee-dee about cars. That's the feeling I got from Dori's description of Takumi as someone who thought a car was four wheels and took gas.
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Why'd you make Takumi retarded like here?

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"What's with all these codes?", the airhead asked his friend.


you should've made Takumi well er.. Matured? Oh well nice update anyway. (:


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b. While no character names have been revealed just yet in the prologue, connect the dots. It is connected to Wangan Midnight and Initial D, though it's on the reverse side of the timeline that most fanfic authors take into account - a prequel to their actual storylines, if only by a few weeks of the 'real' main characters' small-screen debut.

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Anyway, another awesome chapter Dori. Itsuki talking about cars that don't exist in that particular timeline bothers me slightly. But otherwise, another awesome chapter.

(And, yes, I did take note of the Dual Core processor appearing in this fic. But that particular part isn't in the exact Initial D timeline, so Dori could pull off a Shigeno there and insert things that didn't exist at the time.)

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not to mention the r35 skyline... the story takes place in spring 2008, says Dori.

so his Trueno will be a 22 year old rustbucket, or something... i mean look at the details

Maki's SVX is selling for 2200 usd(?)... in 96, the car was still new in 96

so yeah.
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and the plot thickens.... great stuff dori, i always enjoy reading your work.
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Not a bad set of running there as always... Although I got spank ya on a few details... Kenji never worked at the station... Just hung out with the guys there. So i couldn't see the manager using him as a viable employee. But considering it's a fan fic I guess you can play with cannon some... That's the joy of writing your own story... things can be played with...

And Oh yea... Your thoughts on japanese gas are incorrect... Japan Uses the The RON method of octane rating. America Uses the PON or (R+M)/2... We also have higher quality control then most countries...

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Posted: Mar 18 2008, 09:28 PM


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Maki's SVX is selling for 2200 usd(?)... in 96, the car was still new in 96

For reference, the Japanese SVX (any year) is still selling for about 3 million yen on average. Lowest I've seen was about 2.5 million yen. Which is about $25,000-$30,000.
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Well, great piece of writing, I really like the style. Interesting choice of cars too. It's hard to find anything that'd bug me... oh wait... what's with all those Motorolas? tongue.gif
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Well, great piece of writing, I really like the style. Interesting choice of cars too. It's hard to find anything that'd bug me... oh wait... what's with all those Motorolas? tongue.gif

True that... lol. Where are all the DoCoMos? whistling.gif
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Another great chapter. Keep 'em coming.
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Getting even more interesting now. And, as is usual, another well written chapter.

Davey sure is an interesting character. .

Looking forward to more.
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Holy fack, that is one hell of a chapter. You sure are getting there, Reiji-sama. I really enjoyed the conversation between Davey and Takumi, as well as Davey's inner-thoughts on the guy. S'just what I thought he would react like. XD
Oh yeah. ^^ Just because I'm your girlfriend doesn't mean I can't tease you some....

it's phenomenal, dumbass. :3
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it's phenomenal, dumbass. :3

Dammit, she got to it before I could. pinch2.gif
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Personally, I'd like to know how you, the reader, think these chapters are coming along. I'm also curious as to how people think of my 'from the beginning' approach to fanfiction, unparalleled to the majority which I've seen take place either after the end of Fourth Stage or way before the beginning. Like, years before. Either way, please let me know how things are going~! This is a fan-driven fanfic, after all! <3

[Yes, that means you, Turbo_Levin_13 and Red_Comet_7, too. Along with anybody else who's posted after the prologue but not since the third chapter. Or ones who have just corrected certain things and/or typos. -glares at Maki and wing_0-]

It's going quite well. I do have to disagree with small details like Itsuki talking about RX-8s or Takumi's 86 being 23 years old instead of 10 (before thinking of the fact that this could be an alternate universe/ish fic). But otherwise, it's going quite well.

The characters you've put in this fic are quite interesting. Both the Initial D cast and your own characters are well written, both in themselves and in their relations to other characters. Oh, and is it just me, or is there going to be a slight bit of that RP in here like in your previous fic?

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Like in all your fics, the driving scenes are quite well written.

The "from the beginning" approach is an original way of writing ID fics. And meshing that with a great plot brings good results. The plot has yet to get boring. Every single chapter makes me want more.

As I said: It's going quite well.

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Hai, hai... well, the storyline sure is getting more interesting. The interesting fact is how Davey remembers car related things, and nearly nothing about himself. You did a good job on capturing Takumi's character. Also, the inner thoughts of the main character are interesting too. Well... I have nothing more to say, so... keep it up. And don't you dare disappear and delay the updates, nee? *returns the glare* tongue.gif

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Davey does remember his past life but he cant fill in the blanks between getting hit and waking up in Japan; Dori says.

Also, we would like to let everyone know there is no form of magic in this story at all, no catgirls [like Sanagi], no cargirls, like Esprit-chan, nothing like that. Even if Kurumi were to make her debut.. which I don't think he's going to add her at all, she would most likely be some scary ganguro in a 'Yankee'-style biker gang. XD Hey, that'd be kinda cool.. :3 But it'd be irrelevant, wouldn't it? :3
Also he says it takes place in 2008 and is alternate-universe. Although Davey is a recycled character, it has no relation at all to "On the Unbeaten Path", hence, things like the Porsche 959 and the Elise being used for Godfoot and Godhand, not being a problem. Since, he's not trying to improvise on storyline and model years, it being 2008.

Oh, be on the lookout for a red Audi r8. X3
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Hopefully by the time that's done, Maki'll have read up to this 5th chapter. Otherwise, this story will go cold turkey... muahahahahaha. >:x

You know that in that case you'll have to deal with enraged fans, rite? That's one of the things that happens after you make them tongue.gif
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